I would also remove “it is also claimed that” and I would remove the entire sentence “ Today we hear a lot about teenage crime or juvenile delinquency. I believe it is because of good parenting and the way families raise their children.
This essay will discuss some of the many positive effects of good parenting.
They must change the habit of playing to an uncomfortable one, which is the responsibility for studying well.
At this very first stage, children integrate the studying method from the elder members in their family, which really affects their results in the long future.
Good behavior and polite way of communicating with others stem from how a person was taught by his/her family.
In brief, the more people are educated, the more respect they may show.
It's amazing that they are able to use them more or less correctly in essays.
But it doesn't mean that all essays have to be written like this, or that this particular style is the only way to express yourself in written English, or that it's 'better' or 'more correct.' I admire what you have done and the work you are putting in.
As a result, each parent should bear in minds their magnitude and educate their children methodologically.
Edited by writefix on June 13, 2012 - am Edited by writefix on June 13, 2012 - am Edited by writefix on June 13, 2012 - am' data-label='View edit history' data-width='400' data-height='0' data-align='0' Hi Ngo Duy Quang Thanks for explaining about this essay.